Workshop Reflection Joining the Conversation #1

Workshop Reflection for Your Blog

1. What advice did you receive from each member of your group?  Explain each person’s advice separately and be specific.

Joey suggested that I take out the percentages due to the fact that it is unrealistic for a person to use percentages amidst a conversation. He also said that I should remove some of the guests and replace them with the sources that I had instead of working quotes into it.

Meredith loved the stage directions I used and how I allowed the narrator to speak to the audience to fill them in. She gave me some quirky lines to add more comic relief and keep it realistic. She gave me some examples of how I can use the statistics without making it seem like I pulled them straight out of a book and that a random kid knew these random facts of hand.

Lynnsey agreed with a lot of what Meredith and Joey were saying. She like the stage directions but also suggested that I add the sources as direct characters. She liked how the conversation flowed and how I made it in to a real play rather than a fake show.

2. What was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.

Meredith was very helpful with her advice. The little examples she gave me on how to make the conversation more realistic really did help me write a better script.

3. What was the least helpful piece of advice you received?  Explain.

The least helpful piece of information was about taking out the percentages. I think that when I read it allowed I caught on to the fakeness of saying an exact percentage. I was going to change it now to an approximate number because that is how people talk in a real conversation.

4. What are your plans for revision?  Be specific.  I should be able to understand exactly how your work will change in exactly which places.

I plan on rescripting the entire thing. I need more characters and I also need to add in my sources as characters. I think I am going to keep the kids and the classroom setting but introduce the characters as either a guest speaker or a TA perhaps. I need to keep to the realness of the scene so I need to keep the characters in check.