Writing History
Response Critique
- What
was the most helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
After reviewing all of
the comments I noticed a few comments that kept appearing. I was explaining
life situations but I lacked the how and why aspect of it. I wasn’t being as
thorough as I needed to be in order to fully explain how the event impacted me
as a writer.
- What
was the least helpful piece of advice you received? Explain.
In one piece of my paper
there was a comment that said for me to “tell me more”. I am not quite sure
what else to say. I would have liked to see a few more examples or trigger
words that would allow me to view my writing from a different angle.
- What
questions do you have about Megan’s comments?
I don’t really have many
comments about Megan’s comments. I do really like how a lot of the comments
were phrased as questions that allowed me to further expand on my ideas.
- What
are your plans for revision? Be specific. I should be able to
understand exactly how your work will change in exactly which places.
I have some major plans
for revisions. I understand now that I need to emphasize more on the how and
why and not so much the what. In two places in my paper it was stated that I am
veering of topic and that certain things don’t pertain to the purpose of the
paper. I am going to shorten down the experiences and then explain how and why
they sculpted my writing.
I realize that my
conclusion is weak and that it needs to be rewritten. It needs to explain how I
feel towards writing today and why I am the writer I am today. I have a lot to
work on and plan on completely reworking the pieces that need to be revised.
I liked how in your answer in question 3 was explained. I didn't emphasis it in my answer but I do agree with you when you said that you liked the way Megan phrased her comments in questions. It makes it easier for student to fix their mistakes and it gives us an option to expand on our thinking.
ReplyDeleteReferring to your answer in question two, I think I'm right there with you in getting off topic in a few spots. Do you think that the nature of the assignment could have contributed to that, since it required us to hash out some of our history and provide a mental picture to go with our explanations? I certainly had a hard time keeping mine succinct and my paper suffered for it. maybe Magan can give us some tips in class for how to give the right amount of description without getting too far off the topic. I plan on asking her to do so, whether in class or outside it, and maybe you should too.
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